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  • angel_rose
    عضو فعال
    • Apr 2001
    • 78

    #1

    {{The boundaries of the heart}}-My poem for the contest

    {{{The boundaries of the heart}}}

    Who can claim that he knows
    The boundaries of the heart
    That he can draw them clearly
    And put marks where they end.

    Are our hearts some alien forests
    We know their ends
    When trees seize to exist
    And grass is plenty?

    Are they some far away mountains?
    We know we have conquered
    When we stand upon their peaks

    Are our hearts some springs?
    We know their tastes
    When we feel their waters
    Rushing to satisfy our thirst
    And cool our fire
    * * *
    Pondering, dreaming
    And truly mystified by our hearts
    Their leaping
    Their bounding
    Their joys and sorrows
    We can only claim
    That we know their boundaries
    If we can only know the boundaries
    Of our fairly lands
    The depths of the mysteries that lay within
    The weight of every stone of the castles
    We build there
    The height of their battlements
    The distinctive features of the knights
    That roam it
    The beauty of the princesses of the land
    And the wisdom of the words
    Uttered upon that ground

    If we knew all that
    Only then we could proudly
    Pick up our brush
    And draw the boundaries
    Of our hearts
    But their passages
    Would remain a mystery





    I hope that you would like it...............

    and I'd love to hear your comment and any criticism you might have.......



    Thank you
    There is only one me and there will never be another me
    so I must make me,
    the best me that could ever be
  • مــوج
    عضو
    • Apr 2001
    • 45

    #2
    WHAT A LOVELY POEM ,,,,

    I really like it very very much .... hmmmm looks like #1 so far


    my only comment dear Angel is that some of the words are bit difficult to understand for those who do not have good english .. this is what i think .OTHERWISE IT'S PERRRRFECT

    - hope you don't mind it

    wish you the best of luck >> xoxoxox
    آخر تعديل بواسطة مــوج; 18-05-2001, 01:13 AM.
    اللهم إنا نسألك لإخواننا الأسرى فرجاً من عندك ..اللهم فرج كرباتهم واستر عوراتهم وآمن روعاتهم وثبتهم على دينك, اللهم اخرجهم من بين الكفار سالمين غير خزايا ولا مفتونين برحمتك يا أرحم الراحمين

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    • corvette777
      عضو بارز
      • Jan 2001
      • 1796

      #3
      أختي انجل روز!!!!

      هلا بك أختي ، الصراحة لا اصدق تلك القصيدة التي كتبتيها ، والتي يجملها اكثر طريقة تنسيقها ولونها ، معاني قوية وعميقة ، موضوع قوي جدا ، ولكن لي سؤال واحد ولكن لا تفهميني غلط

      هل أنتي فعلا من ألّف تلك القصيدة...ام انها مختارة؟

      لأن الصراحة الكلمات والمعاني والصور والتراكيب كلها قوية جدا وجميلة ولا يقولها الا شخص شاعر كبير ...فانتظر اجابتك


      SOMETIMES IT'S HARD TO BE A HERO

      سبحان الله وبحمده.. سبحان الله العظيم

      {{CLICK HERE}} TO VISIT ENGLISH FORUM

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      • Q8y
        عضو متألق
        • Feb 2001
        • 2092

        #4

        Hello Rose

        Good work and a nice meaning words , wish u a good luck in the

        contest , i can't participate after i read ur poem ..

        wish u to win the contest and the prize is a ticket to the moon ,

        i hope u will spend a nice days there Just Smile Rose

        Q8y*

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        • angel_rose
          عضو فعال
          • Apr 2001
          • 78

          #5
          Salam to u all..............

          well, I'm very

          that u liked my poem.......................



          Dear Mouj............

          No, I don't mind it at all............I guess u r right to some extent. But my execuse is that I can not control my pen .......I let it run freely to express all that he might want to say.......

          One more thing, I don't think that those who are not very good in English care alot about English poetry.......

          Thank you alot for your support and your helpful comment

          ---------------------------------------------------

          Corvetter........

          First thank you dearly

          second........
          أخي العزيز.....كورفيت
          نعم........و نعم........تلك قصيدتي
          يشهد حبري بكتابتها........قلمي و كل أحرفي التي أرتصت لتكوّن كلماتها
          تشهد بذلك حتى شاشة جهازي التي أتعبتها و مفاتيح لوحة التحكم.....و .....و
          هل أستدعي المزيد من الشهود......

          If you truly believe that it is so good and the imagiry so strong......then I might explain that by saying that my relation with poetry goes back to some time.......I've always loved the magic of words and wished to have some of it , at least.

          I hope u r convinced .......


          ------------------------------------------

          lDear Q8y............

          nice to see u...

          Are u really serious and u won't particpate in the contest??
          I's rather withdraw my poem that have u not participate.......

          Say.....u will partcipate.......please


          Is it really a ticket to the moon??.........mmmmmmm
          I'd love to go there......

          Thank u alot........and here is my smile {I just hope it could be a coloured one}
          ************************

          There is only one me and there will never be another me
          so I must make me,
          the best me that could ever be

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          • corvette777
            عضو بارز
            • Jan 2001
            • 1796

            #6
            أختي انجل روز!!!

            اعتذر ، ولكن كان سؤالي فقط للتأكد ليس الا ، كان يمكنك فقط الاكتفاء بكلمة نعم انا كتبتها وقلت لك مسبقا بألا تفهميني غلط ، او تعتبري سؤالي هذا عبارة عن اساءة لشخصك ، العكس أختي ... حقيقة ما شاء الله على قصيدتك جميلة جدا وكلماتها ممزوجة بمعاني راسية وقوية ... واتعذر لك مرة أخرى ان فهمتيني غلط ..وهذا ليس ذنبي عالعموم.... اعتقد انك الأول حتى الآن حتى نرى بقية مشاركات الأعضاء...وشكرا
            SOMETIMES IT'S HARD TO BE A HERO

            سبحان الله وبحمده.. سبحان الله العظيم

            {{CLICK HERE}} TO VISIT ENGLISH FORUM

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            • Q8y
              عضو متألق
              • Feb 2001
              • 2092

              #7


              Dear Sis Rose

              how can i participate now look to my face u surprised me

              with ur perfect words , am raising the white flag now to say am

              outta of here ..

              congratulation in advance

              u take the ticket to the moon , but do i have a place on this flight

              or it is only for winners !!!!!

              anyway it is enough for me to have my place here with u all bcz

              u r my friends ..

              Q8y

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              • angel_rose
                عضو فعال
                • Apr 2001
                • 78

                #8


                Dear corvette.......
                Oh.......God........U don't need to apologize.....

                I didn't take it in any personal way.....

                I thought if I just said yes..........It would appear as if I'm angry or something.......

                I was , in a way, teasing u...........

                أخي كورفيت..........
                لا داعي لأي إعتذار و أنا لم أعتبر سؤالك إساءة......
                وأشكر إهتمامك و حرصك

                sooooooooooooo
                smile please..........
                I hope things seem clearer now..........

                Thank u

                *******************************

                Hi Q8y...........

                well.........look to my face now ............because u won't grt involved in the contest........

                I'd love to beat u...lol

                do u really want to join to that flight?..........
                mmmmmmm.......let me think........
                I'll book u a seat.......that's if u'd enjoy such a trip to such a lonely planet........

                Thank you
                ***********************

                There is only one me and there will never be another me
                so I must make me,
                the best me that could ever be

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                • شيروود
                  عضو فعال
                  • Apr 2001
                  • 222

                  #9
                  angel_rose

                  ....The boundaries of the heart

                  Congratulations....angel_rose..angel_rose....


                  You've Really ...astonished me!

                  Great.Piece ... State of The Art...........Emotions..are......

                  Expressed..well,.. feelings...Imaginations..Inner-dialouge.all are

                  very well Represented.....and

                  Highly Abstractive (self- mined) Discussion That shows balanced

                  Relation......

                  again...Sister angel_rose.
                  ...CONGRATULATIONS..


                  Sherwood....;
                  من يرد الله به خـيـرا...يفقهه بالدين

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                  • angel_rose
                    عضو فعال
                    • Apr 2001
                    • 78

                    #10
                    Hi Sherwood............

                    Thank u.............thank u................thank u..........((I'm bowing))....and blushing.......

                    Thanks for the applause and all your nice words........

                    But hey,........the contest isn't over yet ........and things might turn out differently........

                    and thank u for such a nice analysis...............

                    *************************************


                    There is only one me and there will never be another me
                    so I must make me,
                    the best me that could ever be

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