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  • C.P.G
    عضو جديد
    • Sep 2005
    • 4

    #1

    new member... with something

    hello im a new member here , but i know the forum
    but you have to excuse my english
    maybe its not very good, and thats why im here
    i think this forum will help me to improve it

    well, im a palestinian girl 16 years old
    and i want you all to look at my writing and tell me what do you think
    i hope to get mohammad amin's comment
    because he is veeeeeeery great

    ill leave you with ............. palestine

    Palestine … what is it? Is it a nation? I heard a lot about it, some say it is a tragedy, some say it is superstition. But what do you think? What do I think? What do Palestinians think? . I'll tell you what do we think, we don't think. We know it is a fact. It is our land. We need no one to govern us, we are not xenophobia. No we just want to rule ourselves; we just want our right to live. Is that impossible? No it is not, we will summon up all the strength we got, and all the power we got to make our aspiration come true. We will attack the occupation. It is not a conflict anymore; it is a game of truth and dare. An Israeli vampire came to sip our blood, to take our land away. It is irrational to let him go with that, he is just a Satan, fugitive, superstitious assassin want to take our land, but no we will not betray Palestine, we respect all the heroes who fed the land with their blood. He kills we bring others, because we have the fighters in the mothers uterus, we don't need a writ to make our nation, because we Palestinian are already a nation in our hearts.


  • محمد أمين
    عضو متألق
    • Sep 2003
    • 2582

    #2
    الرد: new member... with something

    اضيف في الأساس بواسطة C.P.G
    well, im a palestinian girl 16 years old
    and i want you all to look at my writing and tell me what do you think
    i hope to get mohammad amin's comment
    because he is veeeeeeery great




    C.P.G thanx alot for your sweet words and welcome in the English forum , and we will be so happy to help you , I'll check this passage and I'll colour the corrected words, by the way I loved this words

    Palestine … what is it? Is it a nation? I heard a lot about it, some say it is a tragedy, some say it is superstition. But what do you think? What do I think? What do Palestinians think? . I'll tell you what do we think, we don't think. We know it is a fact. It is our land. We need no one to govern us, we are not xenophobes. No we just want to rule ourselves; we just want our right to live. Is that impossible? No it is not, we will summon up all the strength we got, and all the power we got to make our aspiration come true. We will attack the occupation. It is not a conflict anymore; it is a game of truth and dare. An Israeli vampire came to sip our blood, to take our land away. It is irrational to let him go with that, he is just a Satan, fugitive, superstitious assassin want to take our land, but no, we will not betray Palestine, we respect all the heroes who fed the land with their blood. He kills we bring others, because we have the fighters in the mothers uterus, we don't need a writ to make our nation, because we Palestinian are already a nation in our hearts.


    Wow .....I wonder how you said "my English is not very good" ... are you kidding ?? your English is so great , I think we have a great writer among us here , this passage is free of Grammer mistakes or spelling ones except for a tiny mistake which is "Xenophobia" because "Xinophobia" is the noun which means the fear of the foriegners , but you said "we are not" then you should use "xenophobes" which means the ppl who have this fear .

    other than that ...you're a great writer ,I hope I see your beautiful writings lightening the English forum like this one .

    sorry for being late in replaying ,
    with my best regards ,,
    Mohamed Amin
    Mohamed Amin

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    • C.P.G
      عضو جديد
      • Sep 2005
      • 4

      #3
      الرد: new member... with something

      i dont know how to thank you mohammad for the correction and the sweet words you said .

      i realy dont know what to say


      my vocabulary betrayed me

      is it enough to thank you??

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      • محمد أمين
        عضو متألق
        • Sep 2003
        • 2582

        #4
        الرد: new member... with something

        don't thank me coz i did nothing
        we should thank you for your nice passage , and I hope it is not the last one here


        with my best wishes

        Mohamed
        Mohamed Amin

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        • C.P.G
          عضو جديد
          • Sep 2005
          • 4

          #5
          الرد: new member... with something

          of curse there will be more writings

          with your great comments every thing is possible

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          • عاشقة المحيطات
            عضو فعال
            • Jul 2005
            • 332

            #6
            الرد: new member... with something

            i like your topic my sister c.p.G ....
            keep going

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            • C.P.G
              عضو جديد
              • Sep 2005
              • 4

              #7
              الرد: new member... with something



              thanx alot for you sister

              your words mean alot to me

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