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  • جلالة الملكة
    عضو متميز
    • Jan 2007
    • 3719

    #1

    When u come !! love !! need me

    السلام عليكم و رحمة الله و بركاته





    When u come closer , 1
    My poor heart feels so warm

    I hear music every where

    The universe dances

    The colors of rainbow dance

    Even people on streets , I see them dance !! 1


    When u say that u love me , 1

    No one dears to hurt me

    No obstacle stops my steps to top

    No more questions torture my mind


    When u need me , 1

    Life is green

    Dreams are truth

    Love is life

    Every body is so kind

    I love the all

    I forgive my enemies

    I wanna make everybody happy

    I'm gonna help who need to

    I'll give lots of charity


    I wanna love

    I wanna sing

    I wanna dance

    I really wanna dance now

    I love u

    Please , 1

    Don't ever stop saying it


    Carry me up

    Stay holding me strongly

    Don't leave me there with no wings

    Give my blood a madness overdose

    Break your fears , 1

    Non of them will change the fate

    Nor destroy the world

    Keep closer , allow us – u 'n me – live happy






    Why are u lost , 1

    While my heart is waiting for u ??!! 1


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    My own words

    I hope you like it



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    عضو فعال
    • Oct 2007
    • 230

    #2
    الرد: When u come !! love !! need me

    Why are u lost , 1

    While my heart is waiting for u ??!!
    i like this part very much thank you very much our queen
    أنت عادة كتابية لا شفاء منها !!!!!!!

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    • دانة بنت الكويت
      عضو متميز
      • Oct 2007
      • 349

      #3
      الرد: When u come !! love !! need me

      wow wow wow

      very beutiful words your majesty

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      • جلالة الملكة
        عضو متميز
        • Jan 2007
        • 3719

        #4
        السلام عليكم و رحمة الله و بركاته

        Dana , Noor


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        • His Majesty
          عضو
          • Jan 2008
          • 17

          #5
          الرد: When u come !! love !! need me

          Dear Queen, 0

          Your poem is a reminiscent of some lines of classical love poem written by some English poets like: 0

          How do I love thee? Let me count the ways. 1
          I love thee to the depth and breadth and height 2
          My soul can reach . . . 3

          by Elizabeth Browning

          Some other lines in your poem like the closing lines

          Why are u lost , 1
          While my heart is waiting for u ??!! 1


          may respond to these lines by Hilda Doolittle

          Ah love is bitter and sweet, 1
          but which is more sweet 2
          the bitterness or the sweetness, 3
          none has spoken it. 4

          Good luck with writing poetry. Poets are the people who can decode unseen human emotions in visual words
          فلا تكتب بكفّك غير شيء يسرّك في القيامة أن تراه

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          • جلالة الملكة
            عضو متميز
            • Jan 2007
            • 3719

            #6
            السلام عليكم و رحمة الله و بركاته

            Thanx your Majesty for your important comment

            But actually , my humble words are verse not poem 1

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            • The crown
              عضو متميز
              • Mar 2007
              • 2396

              #7
              الرد: When u come !! love !! need me

              it's so nice to read from you.. well done
              I like the style you used
              here among the poem


              well done ,we wish to see more from you

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              • جلالة الملكة
                عضو متميز
                • Jan 2007
                • 3719

                #8
                السلام عليكم و رحمة الله و بركاته

                Thanx a lot Crowny

                I hope u enjoy it

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