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  • الوحيد
    عضو بارز
    • Sep 2000
    • 1725
    #1

    Where are you dear



    Wher are you dear

    After teen of years

    Where are you dear

    I still looking there

    Where are the meets

    Where are the dates

    Where is the sweets

    God only just know

    Whether u r here or no

    I miss you too much

    More than what appear

    I remember u all of time

    With every season from any poem

    I know that I coming crazy

    But the matter is not easy

    But to be frank I never care

    When I know u are not there
    من كان منا بلا خطيئة فليجلس على اكتافنا
    كلمات بحث: لا شيء
    • yasmeen
      عضو متميز
      • Oct 2001
      • 6284
      #2
      U r gifted wa7eed

      ur feelings are so sweet,and ur writing is so touchy,and nice


      wa7eed,if its ok with u , id like to correct afew mistakes in ur nice poem


      After teen of years
      (ten)


      I still looking there
      im still looking


      God only just know
      just knows


      I remember u all of time

      all of the times

      or all the time

      or all times


      I know that I coming crazy

      im going crazy


      again brother,its soooooo sweet,plz accept my correction to some words,but its soo nice i didnt want it to b with mistakes

      thanx waheed
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        • ميرامار
          عضو فعال
          • Aug 2002
          • 294
          #3


          Dear bro Waheed


          Is this really your poem, wallah you are really gifted just as what yasmeen has said


          I wish you all the best in shallah, it's very glad to see Arabic people who can express thier feelings in a foreign language just like English,,,,


          Thanks yasmeen for the correction you have added an extra value for his poem


          I'll be waiting for your poems,,, keep it up bro.


          My Best Regards

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            • الوحيد
              عضو بارز
              • Sep 2000
              • 1725
              #4
              Dear Yasmeen I’m really proud by what you corrected because I wrote that poem to see your advices and your correction
              .it’s my first attempt to write in English. so i know that it’s contain allot of mistake and i don’t know way you thought that maybe I get angry form your correction.
              Now I want to tell you that I’m happy really happy by what you told me .
              Yasneen you know that we still learning from our mistakes
              And i run away from other site that i find no troth within the beating .
              Moreover I think that I forget to write this sentence (please feel free to criticize my work in any way you see it suitable)
              Again thank you Yasmeen.

              Dear Meramar:
              yes i try to write such thing.and it's very glad to see encouragement also.

              thank u Meramar
              من كان منا بلا خطيئة فليجلس على اكتافنا

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                • عذوبه
                  عضو فعال
                  • Jul 2002
                  • 331
                  #5
                  you are very good writer

                  that is great mashalla

                  good brother

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                    • yasmeen
                      عضو متميز
                      • Oct 2001
                      • 6284
                      #6
                      its ur first time writing alwaheed

                      then blieve me,your gifted, and u sound like having a promicing future in writing

                      u just take care of the grammar and so ,and ur poems will be just great

                      thump up brother

                      keep the good work
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                        • corvette777
                          عضو بارز
                          • Jan 2001
                          • 1796
                          #7
                          It's really beautiful poem My bro Alwaheed. You have just little grammar mistakes but it didn't effect to understand your goals.. It's nice from you

                          keep this way and write more
                          SOMETIMES IT'S HARD TO BE A HERO

                          سبحان الله وبحمده.. سبحان الله العظيم

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                            • إبتسامة الأمــل
                              عضو متميز
                              • Jul 2002
                              • 964
                              #8
                              my dear.... in>>> hearty....


                              wonderful.....



                              thank you...very much...



                              إبتسامة
                              كن كـ الشمعة.. تحرق نفسها..لـ تضيء غيرها
                              ومالحيـاة إلاّ..الحــبـ ..

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                                  نحن نعالج البيانات الشخصية لمستخدمي موقعنا عبر استخدام ملفات تعريف الارتباط (الكوكيز) وتقنيات أخرى، وذلك لتقديم خدماتنا، وتخصيص الإعلانات، وتحليل نشاط الموقع. وقد نشارك بعض المعلومات الخاصة بمستخدمينا مع شركائنا في الإعلانات والتحليلات. لمزيد من التفاصيل، يُرجى الرجوع إلى سياسة الخصوصية.

                                  بالنقر على "أوافق" أدناه، فإنك توافق على سياسة الخصوصية وعلى ممارساتنا المتعلقة بمعالجة البيانات الشخصية وملفات تعريف الارتباط كما هو موضح فيها. كما تُقرّ بأن هذا المنتدى قد يكون مُستضافًا خارج بلدك، وتوافق على جمع بياناتك وتخزينها ومعالجتها في البلد الذي يُستضاف فيه هذا المنتدى.

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